Jayson Robinson
6 December 2024

Six copywriting mistakes that are holding your conversion rate back

The most common missed opportunities in landing-page copy — and concrete rewrites for each.

Originally published on LinkedIn.

Six easily actionable missed opportunities in copywriting that are holding your conversion rate back. Some overlap between these.

1. Adjective soup and hyperbole

The more adjectives you pile on, the less valuable each one becomes. Be deliberate. Save them for when they’ll have the most impact.

  • Our scalable and secure platform… → Our platform…
  • The innovative, groundbreaking product… → The product…
  • The exciting and engaging event… → The event…

2. Lacking specificity

Specifics build trust, set clear expectations, and make claims seem more credible. The more precise you can be, the better.

  • Groceries delivered fast → Groceries delivered in 59 minutes
  • Top brands work with us → 30% of Fortune 500 companies work with us
  • Book a call → Book a 20-minute intro

3. Unverifiable or unsubstantiated statements

Say things that can be verified, ideally from an external source. Empty statements don’t inspire confidence.

  • We’re a leader in AI software → Gartner ranked us #1 in AI solutions for 2024
  • Our highly qualified trainers → Our industry-accredited trainers
  • Top-rated cleaning service → Rated 4.9/5 by 2,000+ customers on Yelp

4. Telling, not showing

Let visuals speak when they can convey more meaning in less time.

  • Intuitive UX → a GIF of the simple interface
  • Award-winning → an image of awards shelf or badges
  • Cheaper than [competitor] → a side-by-side price comparison graphic

5. Lacking emotive reference points

When done well, emotion triggers action. Use visceral, relatable comparisons. Use sparingly.

  • …without breaking the bank → …for less than a Starbucks
  • …at lightning speed → …faster than a Domino’s delivery
  • …perfectly secure → …uses the same encryption standards as the CIA

6. Generic or overused adjectives

Replace adjectives you use in day-to-day parlance with something more memorable. Throw in some alliteration or assonance if you can. Again, use sparingly.

  • Our amazing brownies → Our mouth-watering brownies
  • Fantastic service → Stellar service
  • Exceptional growth → Gangbuster growth

These are the most common missed opportunities I’ve seen. Anything I’ve missed?